Title: Reqium of a Soldier
snaker - January 25, 2008 08:54 PM (GMT)
I just like to write stories, so i'm gonna tell you this one. This is about snake's mission in a camp in russia.
Proloque will come very soon.
snaker - January 25, 2008 10:14 PM (GMT)
Proloque
Snake smoked his first cigerette of that day. It was still early in the morning in his hotel room in Moskou. Cambell said that he need to prepare for his hardest mission yet. But snake just thought, i'll come thru this, i always do.
He stood up from his chair and walked to the television. 'Nothing,'he said 'only Russian crap.' He turned off the television and walked out the door to meet with Otacon, who just came to the country.
That was the proloque, chapter one coming soon.
NinjaGirl - January 25, 2008 10:30 PM (GMT)
I think it would be a litte more interesting if you gave a little more in the Prologue, and did a spell check on it before you posted it. (just some constrctive critizism.) :)
Gene - January 25, 2008 10:34 PM (GMT)
| QUOTE (NinjaGirl @ Jan 25 2008, 10:30 PM) |
| I think it would be a litte more interesting if you gave a little more in the Prologue, and did a spell check on it before you posted it. (just some constrctive critizism.) :) |
Yeah I agree with that.
JCC - January 25, 2008 10:34 PM (GMT)
.... You are being sardonic, right? This is all one big satire?
OcelotSnake - January 25, 2008 10:55 PM (GMT)
| QUOTE |
Prologue
Snake smoked his first Marlboro cigarette of the day. It was still early in the morning in his hotel room in Moscow. Campbell said that he needed to prepare for his hardest mission yet. But snake just thought “I’ll pull through this, I always do.”
He stood up from his chair and waked to the television. “Nothing” he said, “only Russian things”. He turned off the television and walked out the door to meet with Otacon, who had just arrived in the country.
That was the prologue but it was so ridiculously bad that I've decided to give up and quit while I am behind ahead. |
That's a start.
JCC - January 25, 2008 11:00 PM (GMT)
| QUOTE (OcelotSnake @ Jan 25 2008, 10:55 PM) |
| QUOTE | Prologue
Snake smoked his first Marlboro cigarette of the day. It was still early in the morning in his hotel room in Moscow. Campbell said that he needed to prepare for his hardest mission yet. But snake just thought “I’ll pull through this, I always do.”
He stood up from his chair and waked to the television. “Nothing” he said, “only Russian things”. He turned off the television and walked out the door to meet with Otacon, who had just arrived in the country.
That was the prologue but it was so ridiculously bad that I've decided to give up and quit while I am behind ahead. |
That's a start.h
|
That was a shitty edit.
| QUOTE |
Prologue
Snake smoked some shitty fucking cigarette. I won't dither about with brand names, it's not pertinent, so fuck you.
It was still early in the morning, so he had no idea why he was awake. What a bunch of horse shit.
Campbell said "SNAKE YOU CUNT, GET READY FOR YOUR HARDEST MISSION YET!", but Snake just said "Hey Campbell... fuck you."
He stood up from sitting on the carcass of a child and walked to the television.
"What the fuck's this crazy Russian shit?" Snake said. "Fucking communist pricks."
He turned off his piece of shit television and walked out to meet with Otacon, who had just arrived in the country from jacking off in Japan to crazy Japanese chicks dressed up as cats.
That was the prologue, but it fucking sucked. |
There.
snaker - January 26, 2008 04:22 PM (GMT)
That was funy, just a bit.
Gene - January 26, 2008 05:37 PM (GMT)
JCC...that was funny mate :P
JCC - January 26, 2008 07:02 PM (GMT)
By the way snaker, it's requiEm.
Null - January 26, 2008 07:04 PM (GMT)
lmfao. snaker that is awesome. write more please.
BigK - January 26, 2008 07:27 PM (GMT)
When you're writing your own story, you REALLY shouldn't start with I'm making it soon, or with a prologue, you should start with the actual first chapter itself. This isn't technically against the rules, but it's a bit close, the only thing that makes it close is the prologue. So please have the first chapter ready by today, otherwise I will have to lock it until you do.
JCC - January 26, 2008 07:28 PM (GMT)
Also, this is fan fiction. Move it please, BigK?
snaker - January 27, 2008 05:02 PM (GMT)
i'll do it today, but now i'm babysitting my twelve month old cousin.
JCC - January 27, 2008 05:07 PM (GMT)
Nah, don't worry mate, I'll do it for you, just so that this topic doesn't get locked.
snake got up from his bed and looked around and said agh i'm tired before he went back to bed again and fell asleyp. wen he woke down up he waked over to teh frigde and got a bere that he then drnak.
campbell waked in and he was liek snake wat the fuk man u are getting drnuk b4 ur secret mission
snake looked at him and said o. sorry.
micster - January 27, 2008 05:12 PM (GMT)
Oh richard, Please write more. Im anticipating the next part so much
Gene - January 27, 2008 05:15 PM (GMT)
Haha, this story is starting to get really exiting now.
snaker - January 27, 2008 05:18 PM (GMT)
Hey, not my fault the battery's of my keyboard ad mouse are going death.
OcelotSnake - January 27, 2008 05:20 PM (GMT)
| QUOTE (snaker @ Jan 27 2008, 05:02 PM) |
| i'll do it today, but now i'm babysitting my twelve month old cousin. |
Have you got the "urge" yet?
JCC - January 27, 2008 05:20 PM (GMT)
snake was outside the secret base. there were guards evrywere. they all had big guns and looked scary. snake gluped gulped.
oh my fucking god said snake. how am i going to get past these scary guards
snakes codec began to bleep frantically
snake use ur stealth
my stealth
yes ur stealth
campbell went
okay said snake. time to be stealthy.
snake sneaked past the guards.
omg said snake. i did it. i am the bset.
the guards then turned around and looked at snake.
o shit.
snaker - January 27, 2008 05:23 PM (GMT)
JCC, will you please shut you mounth.
JCC - January 27, 2008 05:25 PM (GMT)
| QUOTE (snaker @ Jan 27 2008, 05:23 PM) |
| JCC, will you please shut you mounth. |
But... but I wanted to write in your style because it has influenced me so.
micster - January 27, 2008 05:25 PM (GMT)
Richard this is the BEST fanfic ive heard!
What did the guards do?! WHAT DID THEY DOOOO!
JCC - January 27, 2008 05:29 PM (GMT)
the guards look at snake
oi you they said what are you doing her you fuckass
i'm a tourist said snake
a tourist
yes a tourist
but this is a secret mission base
i know, riviera travel do holidays at mission bases they were doing auschwitz last year
o
yah
ok go ahead
thnks
snake ran away from the guards to the control room that suddenly apeared out of nowhre
omg a control room wht button do i press
snake pressed the red button
OcelotSnake - January 27, 2008 05:29 PM (GMT)
jonah saki snifed his pants.
wut a suprise
it waz im
snak joind the suckin n sniffin
it wz gud
| QUOTE (snaker) |
| JCC, will you please shut you mounth. |
| QUOTE (Wikipedia) |
| The Mounth is the range of hills on the southern edge of Strathdee in northeast Scotland |
ALEX!
micster - January 27, 2008 05:31 PM (GMT)
OH NO! NOT THE RED BUTTON!
This story is FULL OF WIN
JCC - January 27, 2008 05:34 PM (GMT)
OS, i apprciate dat u wnt to help wid the story but don't change the setting plz thnx
ok nxt chapter
snake looked down at the red button
omg what did i just do said snake
psycho mantis suddenly appeared
no said snake i killed you
mantis replied no u did not snake i am not dead how can this happen said snake and mantis said it happened because mantis had powers inherited from the sorrow
wtf the sorrow
yes
how
i am his son
suddenly ocelot burst through the doro and said no ur not u fukin liar i am
what fuck you said mantis
no fuck you said ocelot
ocelot killed mantis
there you fucking prick said ocelot omg ocelot said snake fuck you snake said ocelot youre going down for god
BigK - January 27, 2008 05:34 PM (GMT)
Enough, JCC, stop busting snaker's chops. I said if he has it by today, he could, I didn't say you had any right to start dicking around in here. You want to write, make your own topic, but don't spam this one. You know better than that, and I've verbally warned you more than enough times about pulling this stunt. In poetry, I said don't go overboard with the "mind fucking" or pushing everyone's buttons, don't spam, and don't come out with doing THIS. I mean, I've done nothing but verbally warn you guys. Do I REALLY need to warn you to get the message across to chill the fuck out? Because that's all that comes to mind.
Cool your jets, I'll decide what do with you in a moment, until then, this thread has run its' course for now, Snaker, if you want it opened with your chapter, pm me, otherwise, locked.
JCC - January 27, 2008 05:35 PM (GMT)
omg no more stories noooo
micster - January 27, 2008 05:35 PM (GMT)
THIS WAS THE BEST FANFIC EVAR
MUCH LOVE!
snaker - January 27, 2008 05:36 PM (GMT)
Just lock it, don't want to finish it if these guy's are just jerking around
JCC - January 27, 2008 05:38 PM (GMT)
Nothing wrong with group jerking. I find it rather relaxing.