This is a poem
Cause it will rhyme
Now I have wasted
Much of my time

Now I am angry
Poets must die
Now I am hungry
I say goodbye

Disclaimer: I'm not a poet.

Hah not bad,still better than mine :D

Grow up.

This is what I call, "Defecation of the Mouth."

You're what I would call gay.

It's not my fault that all of you, except Johnyman, can't see the humor in my poem. I'm not the one who should grow up.

If you don't like it, at least give me some constructive criticism. But I know, too hard for young minds?

What? You call that humour? Have I missed something?

Too hard for young minds?

A. I'm probably at least 10 years older than you.

B.

Ohhhhhhh yeah, WAY too complex for young minds, right? I AM HUNGRY!!! POETS MUST DIE!!! THAT is waaaaaaaaay too complex for the kids here. THREE WORDS!! ! *GASP!!*

This isn't poetry, all short, all retarded, no message, just you dissing poetry, *which even I, as someone who isn't a poet, thinks is retarded.

C. I am what you call gay? Then what do you call yourself? Mega Gay? Or just an immature little cock? ;)

D. Grow the fuck up.

E. If you think THIS is humor, than you need to sit in a tub filled with ice for two hours.

F. <- This is the grade your Poem gets.

You want constructive criticism? Allow me to sum up:

1. Null @ Mar 11 2008, 09:48 PM

2. BigK @ Mar 12 2008, 12:19 AM

3. BigK @ Mar 13 2008, 04:12 PM

So that makes two days of unnoticed criticism, and a short story about how sad of a being you are. And you're calling HIM gay?

Oh, so your poem is 'humorous'! Of course, should've realised when I saw this:

Null @ Mar 13 2008, 01:47 PM

True, cause Null is laughing his ass of right?

I'd just like to state my personal opinion at the end. Your poem has indeed come out from the wrong end of your body my friend. I ain't laughing.

No no, he's right, this is COMEDIC GOLD!!! Here, I got one too, in the same humor genre:

This is a poem
I lack the capabilities to use my brain
Call me unfunny, well I'll show 'em
Fuck you, I'm Scorpion_Rayne

I'm 14 years old
I think I'm funny when I'm not
Who are these fuckers to try and scold?
Oh that's right, I'm fucking retarded, but hey, I gave it a shot.

I have no rhythm, I have no life.
I think I'm creative
But my poem makes you want to stab your ear with a knife.

That someone is bothering to make a diss poem about me is a shock,
Oh how amusing, it's the former Writer Mod
Perhaps he's doing this because I'm acting like a giant cock.

Did I just make a cock reference? I called HIM gay...
I thought I was being funny, but that's not something a straight guy would say....
I'll just come out and admit, I'm GAY GAY GAY!!! And it feels good to get that out so HOORAY!!!

My humor belongs on the far end of the Shit Section of the bookshelf.
Now I will take your advice and I, Scorpion_Dipbshit shall now commence fucking myself.

See? Funny right? Scorpion_Rayne, I think we should start making poetry together, we're both just SOOOOO funny, but you especially, afterall what do I know? I have ZERO sense of humor, and neither does anyone else here right? You're the only one who has humor and we can't appreciate it because our young minds are dumb.

You know, if I were still mod here, I'd warn your ass and lock this piece of shit up, but since I'm not mod, I think I'll just tear it to shreds. Since JCC left the forum, SOMEONE has to do it, right?

Enough flaming.

I don't mind a witty, intellectual beat-down on idiots, but blatant flaming is crossing the already very fine line.

Really, guys, I don't want to give out warnings here.

What? It's HUMOR, right Scorpion_Rayne? But of course, our young minds can't handle it apparently. See, I may not be mod here anymore, but that's just more reason to tear it up, I just don't gotta sugar coat it no more. Maybe it runs the risk of warnings, but when the outcome is this funny, I think it'll end up worth it, heh.

But here's some constructive criticism:

Don't try and be funny SR, because you're humor is as immature as Vlad's. *The former writer for CPO* and it's a basic fuck you to the poets here.

Alright, just try it then - see how far it gets you.

Although, the irony of this situation is how you say it's funny - and for that reason you'll continue flaming - yet, you're lecturing scorpion_rayne for "trying to be funny" because he's only making things worse for himself - when, lo and behold, that is exactly the case with you here.

Just something to ponder on.

There's a reason for that, I'm trying to show him just how FUNNY his type of poetry is. Isn't it funny? Or are our young minds just not able to find the humor?

And see how far that gets me? I predict it will get me far enough...that MIGHT just be me.

Right. You're showing him that being funny will come to no good by breaking your own rule and getting in trouble. You make yourself look like a hypocrite just to show some random dude how trying to be funny will get you nowhere. You'd actually get yourself in shit just to prove your both right and a hypocrite?

That's just weird.

More like a warning...

Isn't it funny? When JCC made that horseshit "fan fic" y'all were jumping over it, I locked it, and put an end to it. This is no different, only now, I don't really have to show that articulation, because the person I'm sharing it with won't understand it. Am I being hypocritical or am I just making fun of his bullshit? The answer is the shit from the bull option. :rolleyes:

Hmmm....warned for thrashing bullshit. Let me ask you something, when I warned JCC for making fun of snaker's fan fic, why was I getting shit for warning him and locking it up? You guys told me I could've let it slide, but I didn't. And when I do that to this guy, it deserves a warning, the difference is snaker was just trying to make a fan fic, poorly written but a fan fic, he was at least trying, and this kid is busting bullshit out. Just thought I'd point that out.

If that results in me being warned, than boo-fuckin-hoo, it's at least worth it. Just like me being warned for flaming a racist was worth it, and still is.

Soooo....as you can tell, I don't quite care. ;)

First of all, I don't recall being one of those that jumped on your ass - I actually didn't care because it meant that I didn't have to deal with that shit.

In any case, like I said, blatant flaming isn't tolerated; I don't care if you're insulting Colin or myself - you do not do it. But like I already said, if you can prove how much of an idiot the said person is without breaking the rules, then I honestly don't care - some people really do need to be told the truth of their retarded ways. But, again, it can't be legitimate flaming.

Well, that's nice to hear. At least I won't have to hear complaining...

Now, that is a great idea - we have no need for this.


LOCKED.